How I Wrote “Intruders”
“There’s a lot of stuff that isn’t in the story explicitly, but it’s helpful that I still figure it out.”
Adrian Tomine’s new comic book, Killing and Dying, will be published next week. For our Beginning
Middle End series, he explains the step by step process
he went through to write “Intruders”, one of the stories in his collection—from notes on
legal pads to laying out to inking the page.
of my stories start with an image, some start with a character, and some start
with a complete plot. This one started with the idea of someone sneaking back
into an apartment that he no longer lived in.
made a lot of exploratory notes in yellow legal tablets, writing down any
thoughts I had about who the character was, how I should tell the story, little
bits of dialogue—pretty much just free-associating. Little by little, I made
decisions, ruled things out, and eventually arrived at something resembling a
plot and a basic sense of what the pages would look like. This is the stage
where I do a lot of calibrating, trying to gauge how much I should emphasize
certain ideas and elements. In general, I try to let myself go over-the-top and
make things painfully obvious, and then I try to gently nudge it back in little
increments until it feels right. There’s a lot of stuff that isn’t in the story
explicitly, but it’s helpful that I still figure it out. I used to do this kind
of writing in fancy sketchbooks and hardcover notebooks, but I realized that
the quality and expense of those types of books was inhibiting me, triggering
perfectionist tendencies that weren’t useful at this stage.
I broke the story up into a layout of pages and panels by typing on a template I set up in InDesign. Sometimes I can just draw a story panel-by-panel, making it up as I go, and that can lead to great results. For this story I was butting up against the limit of my page count, so I had to be very precise about making everything fit. This step allowed me to edit: tweaking the narration, moving scenes around, getting rid of anything extraneous. Then I printed out these layouts and sketched in the images and dialogue with a blue pencil. Even after all that, I still wasn’t happy with some of the narration, so you can see in the upper-left corner I taped on a late revision. I like having the revision hinged on one side like that so I can flip back and forth and see how each version reads with the rest of the page.
This is the final artwork, drawn much larger on Canson Montval watercolor paper. I penciled the artwork with a Muji mechanical pencil containing 0.5 light blue UniColor lead, then inked it using Pitt markers, a Tachikawa “school” nib, a Windsor & Newton series 7 brush, and some Dr. Martin’s Tech ink.
This story, like most of the stories in Killing and Dying, takes place in some kind of weird hybrid of Fresno, Sacramento, Emeryville—basically the kind of small California towns that I grew up in, but aren’t usually portrayed in movies and books. I did a lot of sketching from life and online research so that I could accurately draw the kind of suburban California architecture that I feature on the book’s cover and throughout the backgrounds in the stories (and on this page): chain stores, fast food restaurants, freeway overpasses. It's an attempt to recapture a certain mood or atmosphere that I associate with my years living there, which is very different from that of my present surroundings here in Brooklyn.
There were certain panel compositions that repeated throughout the story, so I sketched those panels on tracing vellum. Whenever I needed to repeat that panel, I could use a light box and quickly trace the basic lines onto the watercolor paper.
When I was finished inking the page, I went back and added some final corrections and detail. I used Dr. Martin’s Bleed-Proof White to add some rough highlights on the guy’s arm, and a straight razor to pick away at the black ink, giving the lower-left corner of the panel that rougher, fuzzier edge.
The final step is to scan the artwork into the computer and clean it up a little bit. Most of the stories in “Killing and Dying” are in color, but I always envisioned this one with a dark, monochromatic look, with more of an emphasis on the actual lines of the drawings. So I just added those blocks of very faint color to help define the panel edges and give the whole thing, I hope, a suggestion of the haze of memory or dreams.
Killing and Dying is published on October
6. For more about the book, go to Drawn & Quarterly.
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“I can’t help but be reminded of all the times I had put off major revisions in my manuscript in favor of tinkering with the minor.”